The boy was holding the staff angrily. The boy was walking quickly on the green grass, the grass felt soft.
This is a piece of writing I did this week in Room 7. I needed to add some adjectives and verbs to a sentence to make it more interesting. The challenge for me is using a simile for my writing.
Hi my name is Byesion and I will comment on your piece of writing that has been titled as "The Eye of The Bridge". I like how you said that it was challenging for you. I think it's an amazing feature that you added to the post. I honestly think you should say something to describe the boy because it just says "the boy" don't you think that's a little boring? I do. you have some great adjectives & adverbs. Do you have a favourite piece of writing inside of this writing? I think you did a great piece of writing so BYE!!
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Hey Levi it me Vincey from Room 25 i really like the descriptive writing this reminds me of when i wrote this story Keep it up .
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